Editorial Report 12a

For this editorial report, I decided to focus on the script that I was using for the video. I decided to add a bit more detail to substantiate my argument.

Selection from "Rough-Cut" vs Re-edited Version

1. The language in the script, I think, makes a bit more sense. There is also more evidentiary support for my argument against current public health and economic policies. 
2. The script is certainly more lengthy, but I also separated it into different paragraphs so each thought doesn't just flow right into one another. The pauses make it easier to read and think about.