Local Revision: Active and Passive Voice

ClkerFreeVectorImages, "Megaphone Loudhailer Speaker Sound Amplifer Voice" via pixabay.com 06/04/2014 Public Domain Dedication License As we write, it is important to make the content interesting to read. By writing mostly in the active voice, we force the reader to imagine the person or the object actually doing the action. It is even better when we provide descriptive verbs that allows the reader to imagine further. Active Voice Specific Billowing Following Complaining Fighting Tapping Persecuting Squash Involved Dedicated Provides Implied Providing Announced According Inching Vomiting Backed Suing Implement Contaminated Declared Declared Cap

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Passive Voice Accompanied

• Most of the verbs in my piece are in the Active General Category. I think that is because most of them are conjugations of the "to be" verbs. However, when describing actions specific to the story, the verbs are very descriptive and specific, such as "Itching" or "Billowing". There is only one instance of the passive voice. I personally think that it is good that most of my verbs are in the active categories; it makes the story more interesting to read as well as brings the audience into the story.
• I personally feel that I could add even more descriptive verbs in the final draft. Although there is a significant amount now, I think it could put my project over the top.