For this blog post, I decided to look as the first section, "Who Was I as a Writer" and re-edit it to flow easier and make more sense.
Raw Content:
This quote was taken from a blog post I wrote at the very beginning of the semester. Even then, I was quite aware of my tendency to put off tasks until the last minute.
The issue of plagiarism has plagued me ever since I was a very small child (I even waited to be born until two weeks after the due date). Every time a large assignment would arise, I would put it off until the very last possible minute.
Science projects, essays, you name it, I could procrastinate on it. It would cause me much stress that I would be tears, but then I would do it all over again for the next project. Talk about the definition of insanity.
Yet, if I look back on all the grades I received for my tears and angst, I would see a high amount of positive comments and high grades. If this is what my procrastination produces, why stop?
Re-edited Content:
This quote was taken from a blog post I wrote at the very beginning of the semester. Even then, I was quite aware of my tendency to put off tasks until the last minute.
The issue of plagiarism has plagued me ever since I was a very small child (I even waited to be born until two weeks after the due date). Every time a large assignment would arise, I would put it off until the very last possible minute. I could never seem to get over the procrastination hump, even thorough high school when the pressure mounted in high school.
Science projects, essays, you name it, I could procrastinate on it. Even for my final senior project, a 10 page paper and presentation on food production in my home town. It would cause me much stress that I would be tears, but then I would do it all over again for the next project. Talk about the definition of insanity.
- I decided to provide more anecdotal evidence, such as the example of my senior project, because I felt that it would not only fill out the paragraph, but also make my reflection more convincing.
- I combined the multiple paragraphs because I felt that the information was more connected than separate.
Looking at the changes you made, I like that you combined several ideas to make the entire script more connected. I also think that using a science project as an example of procrastination was a smart move.
ReplyDeleteSince you are working with a QRG, I suggest including photos of your "to do" lists or maybe past projects. Just an idea. Also, I would make sure the content of the QRG is short and to the point because that is a crucial convention of the genre.