- I suggested that she add more anecdotal evidence to her paragraphs because it felt rather unconvincing without academic examples of procrastination.
- I think adding this evidence with make the entire essay seem a bit more reflective as she would be truly examining her past writing experiences.
- I really enjoyed her tone, and I think I could implement a bit more character into my QRG as she did.
Wednesday, May 4, 2016
Peer Review 15
This peer review was for Olivia Sandhu. I looked at her Editorial Report 15a and decided to make a content suggestion.
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